week 8 comments

kolins- myself in the future
https://kolin-english1.blogspot.com/2016/12/myself-in-future.html?showComment=1481585387382#c4652364444742532965



Jacks- writing center
https://jackcenglish1blog.blogspot.com/2016/12/writing-center.html?showComment=1481585479003#c8944601674286661412

how have your priorities changed from middle to high school

  My main priority in middle school was to fit in. I was really wrapped up in what everyone else was doing and what others thought of me. I was always worried about how people might perceive me if I didn't have plans. Also,  I stressed myself out trying to make so many plans with my friends that I didn't have too much time to do homework or worry about my grades. 

  In high school, that has pretty much all changed. I now don;t really care about what other people think about me or what things some people say behind my back. I believe that quality is way more important than quantity when it comes to friends. Also, I always think that school should be my first priority, so I always make sure I have enough time for school work first. 

writing center reflection

  In the writing center, me and my writing fellow mostly worked on the introduction, conclusion, and how to make my paper flow better. We focused a lot on transitions and the best ways to introduce and then sum up my argument in paragraphs. The most helpful and surprising thing to me was when I read my paper out loud. This helped me catch a lot of mistakes in my paper before she even stated helping me. It also helped me notice the places that needed to flow and go together better.
  I wrote my entire introduction and conclusion and I fixed two of my paragraphs that didn't go together with transitions. This was a really good help to me to have someone else to point me in the right direction with my paper. I was quite surprised how much she didn't actually just tell me what was wrong with my paper, but she gave me advice and questions on how I wanted to improve my paper.

week 7 comments

liza- literary analysis
https://lizasenglish1blog.blogspot.com/2016/12/literary-analysis.html?showComment=1480950947216#c5182017747830904592


jack- 1st Semester Here on Out
https://jackcenglish1blog.blogspot.com/2016/12/1st-semester-here-on-out.html?showComment=1480951170732#c4490311554169872812

free post- short story

    One day, on a quite normal day, he left the store and went inside his house. He went to his bathroom and looked at himself in the mirror. She wondered what he was thinking, but she saw the anger and confusion on his face and that was all she needed to know what was happening. He saw her reflection in his mirror and quickly turned around, but she was faster and dodged his dagger eyes. The next day, she was back. He was standing on his front lawn, ready to go to school. She starred at him, and for a second, she questioned what she was about to do, but her obedient mind got the best of her and she went ahead with it. 

    First, he didn't even see her as she approached him. Next thing he noticed was he was lying on the ground, grasping his heart and begging her for mercy. She felt sorry for him, but went ahead, but with her eyes closed. He felt more and more limp by the second. His mother, Theresa, saw him from the window and ran outside while she called an ambulance. Theresa did not noticed her, so she found her mission completed and left him and his mother to grief. She moved and, lifeless, to her next victim, for she was the grim reaper. 

literary analysis

   In my literary analysis, I have found it pretty easy to develop my body paragraphs especially since we made the detailed outline. This helped me because I wasn't starting from scratch and I already had most of my ideas written out in sentences. Also, the comments that Dr. D wrote on canvas helped me to see some of the things that I needed to change or work on in my paragraphs. 

   The hardest part that I'm finding is developing the introduction and conclusion. I am not sure yet how I want to start or end my literary analysis because I feel like those are the most important parts since the beginning has to be good so the reader keeps reading and the end has to be good so the reader is left with something to think about. I also found that the website grammarly helps me a lot to find all of the grammar errors in my paragraphs.